If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 8:57.
Click here to download the original pages from the short story submission from Maryland titled "Moving Walls."
Click here to download the critiqued pages from the short story submission from Maryland titled "Moving Walls."
During the episode, Dave mentions a book he deems "great," despite "not one sentence being grammatically correct." The book is The Painter by Peter Heller. Check it out on Amazon and see what you think.